新东方金凌虹:考研英语作文克服“例”不从心的方法
个人经历型的举例相对容易完成,因为举例的内容直接与生活和实践有关。然而,相对而言,个人举例型的例子有的时候又显得不是"很上档次"。考生在考场上可能会使用"名人事迹"进行论证:比如:
Thomas Edison gave us an example that success only comes after persistence and hard work. 托马斯.爱迪生给我们一个例子,那就是,成功来自坚持和努力。
又或者:
The example of Thomas Edison best supports the view. He achieved innumerable honors throughout his life, but he never abandoned his pursuit of new goals.
托马斯.爱迪生的例子可以很好地证明这个观点。他在他的一生中获得了无数的荣誉,但是他却从来没有放弃对新的目标的追求。
2004年官方高分范文
Take the famous scientist Thomas Edison for example .He had done very well in his early life, but continued to pursue something more difficult all through his life.
以著名的科学家托马斯·爱迪生为例,他早年成就斐然,但终生都在不断追求更高的成就。
2005年官方高分范文
As a nation renowned in the world for many of its virtues, the Chinese people have been practicing filial piety throughout history. Many much-told stories reiterate this time-honored virtue of loving and respecting the elders, like the story of Ti Ying in the West Han Dynasty who risked her life in order to save her wronged father from corporal punishment.
作为一个以众多美德闻名于世的民族,中国人民自古以来一直奉行孝道。许多广为传颂的故事反复强调这种历史悠久的爱老敬老的传统,如西汉是缇萦舍身营救蒙冤的父亲免遭肉刑的故事。
又如:
Take Yao Ming as a case in point: his unbelievable performance comes not so much from his outstanding basketball skills as from perfect cooperation with his teammates.
姚明在NBA的精彩表现,与其说是来自于个人优秀的篮球技能,不如说是来自于与队友的完美合作。
再或者:
The famous Chinese athlete, Liu Xiang, who has won the Olympic golden medal and kept the world record, is never afraid of being challenged and regards his process of racing as a pleasure, which is often viewed as the best example of the view that confidence is necessary in people's career.
中国著名运动员刘翔是一个很好的例子,证明了自信是人们职业生涯中所必须的。他已经获得了奥运金牌并且保持世界纪录,却从不惧怕挑战,且将自己的运动视为一种快乐。
以上三个例子,相对而言,都是"名人及事迹"举例的较为简易的版本。文字不多,但却也是工整的举例论证,只有第三个例子有较为完整的描述。
其实,在本书"二、第二段的论证手段"中的"意义阐述"论证中的"举例论证"部分,我们就已经提到如何用固定的结构和句子安排来进行"名人及事迹"的举例论证。相对于自由发挥而言的、如上的名人论证,这种固定结构的举例论证相对更加简单一些。回顾一下,这个举例公式是:
Somebody, 插入语(介绍举例对象的背景), could be one of the most convincing cases of ….例子具体内容那个的描述. How could somebody have done something without A ?
于是就有了如下的"名人及事迹"举例论证:
Thomas Edison,one of the greatest inventors and entrepreneurs throughout the history of mankind, could be one of the most convincing cases of how persistence works in the course of pursuing success. He tried thousands of kinds of materials and experienced thousands of times of failures when he invented the first electric light bulb. How could he have succeeded and changed the world without persistence?
人类历史上最伟大的发明家、企业家之一的爱迪生就是坚持如何在追求成功的过程中起作用的最有说服力的例子之一。在他发明电灯泡的过程中,他尝试了数以千次的材料,也经历了数以千次的失败。如果没有坚持和毅力,他怎么可能成功的发明电灯泡并且改变世界呢?"
接下来,我们整理收集了一些"名人事迹"的举例,而且完全符合上面我们所讲的"举例造句公式",希望读者朋友和考生能够细心参阅并且背诵以下例子:
Jeremy Lin, one of the most influential Asian basketball players in NBA could be one of the most convincing cases of how diligence works in our life. When he first appeared in the match,quite a few people held that he could not even survive in NBA, let alone become a famous basketball star. However, rather than being affected by these negative words, he trained harder. How could he have finally succeeded in NBA without diligence?
"NBA里最有影响力的亚洲籍运动员林书豪可以是勤奋在我们生活中如何起作用的最有说服力的例子之一。当他第一次出现在赛场上的时候,很多人认为他根本无法在NBA生存下来,更别说成为一名著名球星了。然而,他非但没有收到这些负面言论的影响,反而训练更加刻苦。如果没有勤奋的话,他怎么可能最终在NBA取得成功呢?"
当然,除去如上运用了举例公式、大量描述的名人事迹之外,考生也可以对名人事迹进行"非公式化的"、具体的描述:
Surveys conducted by some biographers have also demonstrated that almost all successful men and celebrities have built their mansion of success on the bedrock of adversities. Take Georgia Washington, one of the greatest founding fathers of the United States of America, as a case in point:to break away from the British Empire and build an independent country,he led the American War of Independence. However,problems and challenges such as inexperience of war, adverse weather conditions, shortage of ammunition and smallpox arose. Confronted with these adversities, he became more mature and composed, and then won the Revolutionary War finally through his courage and wisdom. It was these adversities that made him a great man and the one who changed the world radically.
由一些传记作者展开的调查也已经发现,几乎所有的伟大的人物和名人都将自己成功的大厦建立在逆境的基石上。以美国最伟大的开国之父之一乔治亚.华盛顿为例,为了脱离英国的殖民统治,建立一个独立的国家,他领导了美国独立战争。但却遇到了诸如战争经验不足、气候条件恶劣、弹药不足及天花肆虐等各种问题和挑战。面对这样的逆境,华盛顿变得更加成熟镇定,并且通过勇气和智慧取得了独立战争的胜利。正是这些逆境使他成为一位伟大的人物并最终完全地改变了世界。
Honesty can be a more noble quality than intelligence, ability and anything you can learn from books. George Washington,one of the most influential founding fathers of USA, was not only famous for his wisdom, courage and political talent,but also his honesty. When he was a little boy, out of curiosity he chopped down the cherry tree planted by his father. Then his father came back, when asked by his father what has happened,he did not lie to his father but admitted his fault frankly. Surprisingly, rather than scolding Washington, his father exclaimed"a honest boy is more valuable than one thousand cherry trees!"
诚实甚至是比智慧、能力和任何你能从书上学到的知识更为高尚的品质。美国开国之父乔治亚华盛顿,不仅以他的智慧、勇敢和政治才能闻名,更以诚实为人闻名。在小的时候,他曾经砍掉了父亲栽种的一株樱桃树。当他父亲回来后,面对父亲的询问,他没有撒谎,而是诚实地承认了自己的错误。令人奇怪的是,他的父亲非但没有责怪他,反倒大声惊呼:"一个诚实的孩子胜过一千株樱桃树"!